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Some people believe that to be successful in a sport, natural ability is necessary, while others think hard work and practice is more import. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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There are some
discussion
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 about how
people
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 get achivement in
sport
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 base on their natural gives and someone who get their success
because
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through
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 hard practice. In
this
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 argument will be
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necessary conclusion
. On the one hand,
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half
 of
people
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 think that natural talent is important
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to be more
success
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successful
 in
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sport
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sports
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 because it was a god give to them
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by God.
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enjoy
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themselves and
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having
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have
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 fun
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doing
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 their
sport
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C.Ronaldo
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, C. Ronaldo
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 is
famous
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a famous
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foodball
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football
 player with talented
skill
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skills
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 in football and
become
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has become
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role
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a role
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 model
by
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for
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 other
people
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, I strongly believe that
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apply
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progress never
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insults
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Somepeople
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Some people
 with strong
consistant
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consistency
 to practice and have a big grid is
a
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an
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 important key to success.
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, one of my
friend
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friends
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 named thomas get 1st champion in school taekwondo because he always
practice
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practices
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 every day in a group or alone. In conclusion, it is a luck to have a natural talent in
sport
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 to get achivement
but
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, but
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this
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these
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 talented
people
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 can be
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restricted
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a
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apply
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people
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 with a strong
grid
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mind
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 and
hardworker
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hard work
 in
process
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the process
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in
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of
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sport
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task response
Answer both sides more fully. Say why natural skill helps, and why practice helps, with clear reasons.
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Give your opinion in a clear way from the start and keep it the same to the end.
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Use examples with more detail. Explain how the example shows your point.
coherence and cohesion
Make each body paragraph follow one clear main idea. Then add 2 or 3 linked sentences about it.
coherence and cohesion
Use simple linking words well, like first, also, for example, on the other hand, and in conclusion.
coherence and cohesion
Check that each sentence connects to the one before it. Some parts now feel hard to follow.
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You discuss both views and give your opinion.
coherence and cohesion
Your essay has an introduction, two body parts, and a conclusion.
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You use examples to support your ideas.
Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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