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You should spend about 15 minutes on this task. There have been several complaints about the reception area where visitors to your company arrive. Your manager has asked you to suggest how the reception area could be improved. Write a letter to your manager. In your letter, describe the complaints that have been made say why the reception area is important suggest how the reception area could be improved

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Dear
sir
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Sir
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, I am writing
this
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 letter to indicate the lack of facilities in our
company
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company's
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reception
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area
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 that
are
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need
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 to be improved immediately.
Firstly
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, there
is
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are
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 only
limited
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a limited
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numbers
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number
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 of chairs
are
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apply
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available at the
reception
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area
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. If
more
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a larger
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 number of
visistors
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visitors
 arrive, it will be difficult to accommodate all of them together there.
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, there are only two fans in the
reception
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area
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, which
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that is
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 not enough for all visitors
arrive
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to arrive
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 there.
Furthermore
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,
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a lot
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 of
visistor
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visitors
 have left their complaints regarding the
reception
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area
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into
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in
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 our review box. So, it is very urgent to place more chairs
at
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in
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 the
reception
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area
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.
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, more fans must be arranged in order to get relaxed, tiredless and comfortable sitting of the company
visistors
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visitors
. It will create
more
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a more
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impression
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impressive impression
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 regarding the company.
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, I kindly request that you make the necessary arrangements immediately to improve the facilities in the
reception
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area
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. I look forward to hearing from you. Yours faithfully, Rahul

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task response
For task response, cover all three points more fully. Say the complaints, why the area is important, and give clear ways to improve it.
task response
For task response, add one or two details about why first ideas matter for guests and clients.
coherence and cohesion
For coherence and cohesion, use clearer linking words like First, Also, Finally.
coherence and cohesion
For coherence and cohesion, keep one main idea in each part. Put complaints in one part and fixes in another part.
task response
You answered the main purpose of the letter and gave some useful ideas to improve the area.
coherence and cohesion
Your letter has a clear opening and a polite ending.
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