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Writing Samples
Band 1

People are never satisfied and always want more. In what ways is this a good thing and in what ways is this a bad thing? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Answer both sides more fully. Say clearly why wanting more is good and why it is bad.
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Use one clear main idea in each body part, then add one simple example.
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Write a short introduction and a short ending to show your full answer.
coherence and cohesion
Put your ideas in a clear order: introduction, bad side, good side, conclusion.
coherence and cohesion
Use easy linking words like first, also, however, and in the end.
coherence and cohesion
Make each sentence short and clear so the reader can follow your meaning.
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You answer both parts of the question, good and bad.
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You try to give a reason about parents and children.
coherence and cohesion
Your essay has more than one paragraph.
coherence and cohesion
Some ideas connect to each other in a simple way.
Fully explain your ideas

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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