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Every day, millions of tons of food are wasted all over the world. What are the causes of this problem? What measures can be taken to solve this?

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task response
Answer both parts more fully. Say more about why food is wasted and give more ways to fix it.
coherence and cohesion
Use clear main ideas in each part. One part for causes, one part for ways to solve it.
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Add simple examples that match your ideas. This will make your points stronger.
coherence and cohesion
Use linking words in a clear way, like first, also, for example, and in conclusion.
coherence and cohesion
Check that each sentence is easy to follow. Some ideas are hard to understand now.
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You answered both questions: causes and solutions.
coherence and cohesion
Your essay has an introduction and a conclusion.
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You give some real ideas, like teaching children and giving extra food to other people.
Fully explain your ideas

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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