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Band 2.5

In many countries, it is obligatory for school children to wear a uniform. Do the advatages of this policy outweigh the disadvantages? Provide reasons to support your answer and include any appropriate examples to illustrate your points.

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countries
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benefits
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 can stop
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 and stop any
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competition
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situation
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feasibility
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wearing
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discuss
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begin
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 can stop bullying in
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injustice
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 is for equality between students
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to prevent
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 any shirts above the
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because
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uniform
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uniformity
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student
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students
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 and bullying between them .

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task response
Answer both sides more clearly. You say the good side is stronger, but you need a fuller look at the bad side too.
task response
Make each main idea larger with one clear reason and one clear example.
coherence and cohesion
Use simple link words in the right way, like First, Also, However, and In conclusion.
coherence and cohesion
Put one main idea in each body part. This will make your essay easier to follow.
coherence and cohesion
Check that each sentence connects to the one before it. Some ideas now jump too fast.
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You give a clear opinion that school uniform has more good points than bad points.
task response
You include one example about rich and poor children, and this fits the topic.
coherence and cohesion
Your essay has an introduction, body parts, and a conclusion.
Fully explain your ideas

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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