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When a country develops its technology, the traditional skills and ways of life die out. It is pointless to try and keep them alive. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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country
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The country
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 is
considerd
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considered
 to maintain
such
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as
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apply
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development,
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agriculture
,
economic
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economy,
 and imports and exports.
then
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. development is essential for
emerging
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the emergence
 of
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country
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a country
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 like. Singapore, UAE, srilanka -
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Actually,
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 I strongly agree with
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 statement,
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nowdays
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nowadays
technology
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 is
vital
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a vital
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 Part of
day day to day
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day-to-day
life
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. boor because
of
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the
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 world
are
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is
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 changing for dramasora dynamic
enviroment
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environment
 with people. appearance and activities. and. A
country
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 develops its.
technology
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that is
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 significant
as
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apply
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more than
other
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others
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. fields
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 as medicine, management,
engineering
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and engineering
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country
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 emerges
its
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with its
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technology
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, the traditional
skills
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 and
way
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 of Isfe destroy in every where.
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Thus
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Thus,
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 traditional Heritage and rituals are plunging in all of the
country
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and
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, and
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this
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 is
maping
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mapping
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 rapidly changing the human
mind set
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mindset
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for
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, for
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10
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for 10
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 decades. Ago, Homo sapiens live environmental place and
traditional
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had traditional
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skills
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 to diffrent as more than
nowdays
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.
this
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 time don't develop the
technology
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 so that something of innovation are discovered to face the with lot of struggle
but
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, but
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nowdays
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nowadays
 innovation
and.
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and
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 creativity are
easly
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easily
 found in some days because
of
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apply
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technology
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are
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is
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 increasing for meading tomeet human wants and needs.
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 everybody
are
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is
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.
changing
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change
 in road routine
life
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 from dynamic of
technology
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. Morpover some
person
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people
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 think that tradinational Skill and
way
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 of
life
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dre out which is
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are
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 important to try
and
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to
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 keep them
but
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, but
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 a
country
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don't
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doesn't
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 develop
Its techonology
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its technology
 like emerging of other
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country
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countries
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.
is
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There are
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 very
there fore
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few
country
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 development features
Poor stage to face
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. It is at a poor stage
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 in every field. Inaddition If A
country
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 develops its
technology
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. infrastructure, the traditional skill and
way
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 of
life
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 methods and styles
as well as
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 aspects would
changp
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change
.
in
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In the
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 future
so
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, so
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 that peoplealife methods is very
biggest
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big
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 change
more than
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from
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 traditional
life
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way
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for example
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 A decades
during
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, during
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 time constructiora building of construction work is
hard
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a hard
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 and long term process
and
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, and
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lot
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a lot
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 of worker because
of
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they
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 don't have sabe construc tion related equipment
but
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. But nowadays,
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nowdays
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 construction. used
topsaftey the
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the top safety
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technology
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 related equipment.
therefore
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 end of construction work
to
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is to
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 finish. looking
methodsi
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methods
 so every person attract in
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.
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country
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 prefer to develop the
technology
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 field.
so
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So
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 that people want to live in dynamic
of
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lifestyles
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life
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 styles and
technology
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 related skill without
past
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the past
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 of traditional
skills
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 and
life
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 style there after traditanal
skills
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 and
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life style
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lifestyles
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 are useless to recover them alive
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stongly
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strongly
 agree
to
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with the
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 statement that
technology
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 is e essential for developing
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country
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countries
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 to quit the traditional
skills
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 and
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life style
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lifestyles
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coherence cohesion
Write one clear main idea in each body part.
coherence cohesion
Use simple linking words like first, also, for example, and in conclusion.
task achievement
Make your opinion clear from start to end and do not change it.
task achievement
Explain your examples more clearly and show how they support your idea.
task achievement
Answer all parts of the question with direct and simple sentences.
task achievement
You gave a clear opinion: you agree with the statement.
coherence cohesion
Your essay has an introduction, body parts, and a conclusion.
task achievement
You tried to use examples about building and old life.
Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Technological advancement
  • Efficiency
  • Global connectivity
  • Cultural identity
  • Diversity
  • Innovation
  • Coexist
  • Sustainable
  • Eco-friendly
  • Energy-intensive
  • Practical skills
  • Self-sufficiency
  • Homogenize
  • Preservation
  • Global diversity
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