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Your friend has been offered a place on a course at the university where you studied. He/She would like your advice about finding a place to live. Write an email to your friend. In your email describe where you lived when you were a student at the university recommend the best way for him/her to look for accommodation warn him/her of mistakes students make when choosing accommodation

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Dear Maria, I hope you are doing well. I heard that you got admission in the
university
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 where I
have
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apply
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studied my marketing course, and you want my advice about the accommodation. I lived in the
university
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 hostel during my course. It was an ideal place for me to stay as it was cheap and close to the
university
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 campus. As you know
that
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,
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 I hate wasting my time on commuting for long distances. I'd suggest you
to
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apply
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stay in the hostel during your course. If you make up your mind, you can go to the
university
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 hostel office. You just need to fill
a
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out a
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form and pay the rent
of
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for
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 the following month. The best part is that you could
also
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 select the
room
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 of your own choice. I want to warn you about the mistakes many students
do
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make
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while
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 selecting
the
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a
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room
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. Many students choose
ground
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the ground
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 floor so that they don't have to use stairs.
However
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, I'd say that you select a
room
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 on
third
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the third
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 floor as these
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room
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rooms
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 are more spacious and
has
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have
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 good ventilation. Kind regards Asma

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task response
Answer all parts more fully. You tell where you lived, how to look, and one warning, but the warning part can be a bit more clear and full.
task response
Give a little more detail about the best way to find a place. For example, say why the hostel office is better than ads or agents.
coherence and cohesion
Use linking words a bit more carefully. Most ideas move well, but some lines feel a little sudden.
coherence and cohesion
Check paragraph focus. Each part is clear, but the last part can better connect the mistake and your advice.
coherence and cohesion
Watch small grammar word choices because they can make meaning less clear, like 'suggest you to stay' or 'these room are'.
task response
You cover the main points of the task.
coherence and cohesion
Your email has a clear opening, body, and ending.
coherence and cohesion
Your ideas are easy to follow most of the time.
Fully explain your ideas

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • dormitories
  • rental agreements
  • house-hunting
  • budgeting
  • commute
  • utilities
  • security deposit
  • lease
  • proximity
  • amenities
  • landlord
  • tenant rights
  • real estate agent
  • furnished/unfurnished
  • flatmates
  • on-campus/off-campus living
  • viewings
  • public transportation
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