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The graph below shows the different modes of transport used to travel to and from work in one European city in 1960, 1980 and 2000. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information below.

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The bar chart provides key information about the different modes of
transport
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 used to travel to and from work in one European city in 1960, 1980,
2000
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and 2000
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.
Overall
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, the graph shows that there are differentiation in the ways of
transport
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 during the given years.
In addition
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, the main transportation method used in each
years
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year
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 varies
than
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from
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 the other.
Whereas
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 in 1960 the main
source
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 of
transport
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 was by
foot
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foot,
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while
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 in 1980 they relied on the bus
the
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,
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 public transportation as their main
source
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 of
transport
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and
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, and
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 in
the
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apply
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2000 they used cars more than any other
source
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.
According to
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 what is shown, in
the
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apply
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1980 there was almost a significant moderate rate between all
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source
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sources
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 of
transport
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unlike
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, unlike
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the
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apply
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2000
where
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, when
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 bikes and walking
by
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on
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 foot
was there
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were the
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 least used type. In terms of 1960, it shows that cars
was
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were
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 the
most unlikeable
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least preferred
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 way to go to work because nearly half of the workers preferred walking
by
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on
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 foot and using their
bike
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bikes
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instead
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 of using the bus or cars.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 75%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words transport, source with synonyms.
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