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Some experts believe that a second language should be taught at an early age. Do the advantages ouyweigh the disadvantages

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Learning a
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 at an early age, in my opinion its a great thing to do at
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 are going to use your
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 means you will
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 from learning.
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 learning a
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 could give you some advantages,
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 in the future when you travel the world lets say with your family,
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 will help you communicating with people easier. and you could get a job because of your
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, you can be a translator for an embassy or for a company,
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 will pay you a serious amount of money, only because of something you learned as a child.
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 we have the
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, I do not think that learning could come with
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, I have one only in mind which is how can you control learning in school and learning a
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 at the same time,
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 controlling it will not be impossible, you just have to manage your time or a parent who makes a simple schedule for you to understand, I do not think that there is any other
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 learning a
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 at a young age is fantastic, and the advantages
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For task response: answer the question more fully. You say the good points are stronger, but you need to explain both sides a bit more.
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For task response: give clearer ideas. Some parts are too general, so add one more clear reason for each side.
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For task response: use more exact examples. The travel and job ideas are good, but they need a little more detail.
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coherence and cohesion
For coherence and cohesion: link ideas with simple clear words like first, also, however, and in conclusion.
coherence and cohesion
For coherence and cohesion: check sentence order and grammar, because some sentences are hard to follow.
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For task response: you answer the main question and give your opinion clearly.
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For task response: you use relevant examples like travel and work.
coherence and cohesion
For coherence and cohesion: your essay has an introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion.
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For coherence and cohesion: you try to show both sides before giving your final view.
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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • bilingual
  • cognitive development
  • multilingual proficiency
  • curriculum integration
  • linguistic acumen
  • cultural competencies
  • globalization
  • neuroplasticity
  • second language pedagogy
  • academic performance
  • resource-intensive
  • cognitive overload
  • heritage language preservation
  • language immersion
  • parental engagement
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