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Houses are essential for people. Some argue that governments should offer free houses for people who can not afford to pay for it. Do you agree or disagree with the statement.

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Is the government supposed to offer free houses for people in need
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 depends on the case or family in need of the house,
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however
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apply
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in
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general,
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 I do agree. At first I will talk about the cases that I support there demands on their land, in Kuwait when you get married you apply for an empty piece of land and after 10 to 20 years you will get it for free
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 you can build it or sell it or whatever in
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 situation I have no problems, because you are going to start a family you will
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 get children which means you need a larger
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 to fit in with your whole family and live comfortably,
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 to that waiting for a couple of years will actually help you to save money for building your home in the future it will not be cheap. Now for the cases i disagree with are a single individual who is requesting a house to live there alone when he does not need all that space alone,
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 a single man wants a land let`s say that he has the money to build it and he does he will be stalling other people in need for a bigger
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, because why would 1 man take all that space for him self when he does not require it, he can live happily in an apartment. There is no point in living in a 1000m2 home alone,
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that's
 why I disagree in
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 situation. In
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 if the person applying fills the requirements he should get a free
place
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 to live in, because there is nothing more important than living in
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a good
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place
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 that fits you and your family. Thats why I agree that everyone should get a housing plot for their families.

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Make your main idea more clear at the start. Say one clear answer and keep it the same all through the essay.
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Explain your ideas more. Some points are good, but they need more detail to show why they are right.
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Use examples that fit the question more closely. Your Kuwait example is useful, but link it more clearly to free houses from the government.
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Put one main idea in each body part. This will make your essay easier to follow.
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Use simple linking words well, like first, however, for example, and in conclusion.
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Check that each sentence connects well to the next one. Some parts jump too fast from one idea to another.
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You give a clear opinion and you stay near the topic.
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You use a real example to support your view.
coherence and cohesion
Your essay has an introduction, two body parts, and a conclusion.
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The order of ideas is mostly easy to follow.
Fully explain your ideas

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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