Modern lifestyles are completely different from the way people lived in the past. Some people think the changes have been postitive, while others believe they have been negative. Discuss both these points of view and give your opinion.

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There is no denying the fact that modern
lifestyles
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are more advanced than
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past
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it is a commonly held belief that these modern developments had a positive impact on new
lifestyles
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. There is
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an argument that these changes are negative.
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topic from both points of view and express my opinion. On
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hand, new generations think that modern changes have enhanced the quality of
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, new efficient technology affords comfortable and efficient solutions
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in order to enhance the quality of
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, general health has developed and become more sustainable
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new medical technologies and innovations.
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, the University of Jeddah faced many cancer types with new medical technologies and developments.
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, many of them became extinct.
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, other people think that current
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lacking of many essential human needs.
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the civilisation and rapid
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, people started to lose the strong and interactive social connections which are crucial to mental health.
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, in the past, social being was simpler
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community
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communities
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were more interactive and closer to each other.
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, rural
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lets families work together to afford the essential needs
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as food and water. In conclusion, despite people having different views, on balance,
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, I tend to believe that the current revolution showed a great sample of what humans can achieve, so I think that new changes affected general
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aspects positively.

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Answer both sides more fully. Your view is clear, but each side needs a bit more detail.
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Use examples that are more clear and easy to believe. One example about cancer is not fully clear.
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Make your main ideas more direct. Some sentences are hard to follow because the meaning is not exact.
coherence and cohesion
Your essay has a clear four-part shape: intro, two body parts, and end. Keep this plan.
coherence and cohesion
Link ideas in a smoother way. Some words like 'In other words' are used many times and do not always fit.
coherence and cohesion
Support each main point with one clear reason and one clear example. This will make your body parts stronger.
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You discussed both views and gave your opinion, so you answered the full question.
coherence and cohesion
Your introduction and conclusion are both present and easy to find.
coherence and cohesion
The essay is organized into clear paragraphs, which helps the reader follow your ideas.
Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general
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