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The line graph below shows the average monthly temperatures in three major cities.

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The line graph illustrates how the climate of three cities changes throughout the
year
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. (Units are measured in
Celsius
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)
Overall
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, the temperatures in
Paris
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 and
Dubai
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 follow a similar pattern,
although
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 it is hotter in the Arabian city than it is in
Paris
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 all
year
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 long. Meanwhile, Sydney has a completely opposite trend to the other cities. In January, the average
temperature
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 in
Paris
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 accounts for 5
degrees
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,
whereas
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Dubai
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 records just under 20, which is the coldest it gets in
this
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 region during the
year
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.
Thereafter
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, these figures increase steadily until they reach the hottest rates throughout the period. For the French city,
this
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 occurs in July by registering 20
degrees
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Celsius
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, and it remains at
this
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 value in August, whilst in
Dubai
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, August is the hottest month in the
year
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, as the average
temperature
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 rises to over 35
degrees
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Celsius
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. Afterwards, the
temperature
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 of the two cities decreases consistently until December, when it soars to above 20 in
Dubai
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, and 5 in
Paris
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.
On the other hand
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, the weather in Sydney has a reverse trend, as the
temperature
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 accounts for around 24
degrees
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Celsius
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 in January,
then
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 it declines until it reaches approximately 13
degrees
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 in July before it starts to warm again month after month until reaching about 23
degrees
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 by December.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words year, celsius, paris, dubai, temperature, degrees with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reach" was used 2 times.
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