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The graph shows the number of people taking part in 4 kinds of sports in a particular region between 1985 and 2005.. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The line graph illustrates the
number
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 of
people
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 participating in 4 different kinds of sports in a particular region between 1985 and 2005. The 4 kinds of sports include basketball,
tennis
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,
badminton
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, and
rugby
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. In 1985, compared to others, most
people
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 joined to play
rugby
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. And there were 150
people
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 taking part in
tennis
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. About basketball and
badminton
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, each of them were less than 100
people
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 participating in.
Nevertheless
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, in 2005, the
number
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 of
people
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 had changed. From 1985 to 2005, the
number
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 of
people
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 who played
rugby
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 had dropped. Especially from 1995, it decreased dramatically afterwards. In 2005, the
number
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 of
people
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 who played
rugby
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 was the same as the
number
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 of
people
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 who played
badminton
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.
On the other hand
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,
People
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 who played
tennis
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 had slightly risen since 1985. Even though there are some shifting situations in
rugby
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 and
tennis
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, the
number
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 of
people
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 who take part in basketball and
badminton
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 had bearly changed.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 73%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, people, tennis, badminton, rugby with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "changed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 6 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • participation
  • trend
  • increase
  • decrease
  • fluctuation
  • popularity
  • demographics
  • sports
  • region
  • data
  • analysis
  • comparison
  • notable
  • overview
  • highest
  • lowest
  • 20-year period
  • particular
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