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The charts below show the main reasons for study among students of different age groups and the amount of support they received from employers.

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The bar charts provide key
informatiom
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information
 about the reasons for
study
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according to
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age
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the age
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 of
student
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the student
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 and the
number
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employer
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of employer
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support
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supports
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, by
age
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 group. 
Overall
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,
the
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apply
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most student studey for
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career
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a career
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 higer than students
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study
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who study
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 for
interest
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,
whereas
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 another chart
the
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shows the
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 most
support
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 for
youngest
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younger
 people
higher
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, higher
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 than
over
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older
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age
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 groups. In detail, the most figuer of students
study
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 for
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career
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a career
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 under 26 at 80, the second
higer
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highest
age
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 groups 26-29 at 70.
While
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 the
number
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students
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of students
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study
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who study
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 for
interest
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 decreases with decreasing
age
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. Over 49
represent
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represents
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 70 , the 40-49
has
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represents
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 40.  
the
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The
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 least
number
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 of
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study
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studies
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 for
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career
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a career
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 at 18 and for
interest
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 at 10.
the figuer
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The figure
 for 40-49
career
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 and
interest
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simelar
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similar
 account at 40.
In contrast
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, the most
poupler
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popular
support
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 for
group
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groups
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 aged under 26
about
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is
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 at 64,
in
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with
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 26-29
repesent approximatly
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representing approximately
 50. The least
number
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age
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 30-39
around
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, with around
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 35
employer
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, employer
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support
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.
provideing
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providing
 help to
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age
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the age
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groub
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group
 40 to over 49
around
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, around
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 44.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words study, age, number, support, career, interest with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Lifelong learning
  • Professional development
  • Adult education
  • Career advancement
  • Personal enrichment
  • Academic pursuits
  • Upskilling
  • Reskilling
  • Educational attainment
  • Tuition reimbursement
  • Flexible work arrangements
  • Work-study balance
  • Financial assistance
  • Professional growth
  • Study leave
  • Employee retention
  • Workforce development
  • Time management
  • Self-improvement
  • Motivational factors
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