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Writing Samples
Band 2

Most people do not care enough about environmental issues.To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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The majority of
people
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 show insufficient concern for ecological issues. On the one hand, environmental issues have become a major concern worldwide;
therefore
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, environmental problems are
increasingFor
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increasing. For
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 instance, most
people
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 throw
waste
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 on the street, which causes pollution and is harmful to the environment.On top of that, factories are harmful because
harmful
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the harmful
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 chemicals are detrimental.Other causes include plastic
waste
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, littering, deforestation, industrial
waste
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, overpopulation, vehicle emissions, burning fossil fuels, poaching, and loss of wildlife.
On the other
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hand
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people
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 should reduce pollution
and
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, and
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this
Fix the agreement mistake
these
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 environmental problems
drop
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will drop
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. We are
protected
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protecting
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 the environment
so
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, so
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 Individuals cleaned the habitats.
For example
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 human should protect nature,
planting
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plant
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 more trees,
reducing
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reduce
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 plastic use,
recycling
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recycle
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waste
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, avoiding littering.
People
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 can protect the environment by recycling
wast
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waste
 and planting
are
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apply
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trees help reduce air pollution In conclusion, protecting nature is in our hands.Most
people
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 do not care enough about environmental issues.To what extent do you agree or disagree with
this
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 statement?

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Answer the question more clearly. Say if you agree, disagree, or partly agree in the first part and keep this idea to the end.
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Add one or two clear main ideas only. Now the essay gives a long list, but the ideas are not explained well.
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Use examples that are more specific. For example, talk about waste in your town or plastic in rivers.
coherence and cohesion
Make each body part about one main point. This will help the reader follow your ideas.
coherence and cohesion
Use easy linking words well, like first, also, for example, and in conclusion.
coherence and cohesion
Check sentence order and grammar because some sentences are hard to understand.
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You wrote about the topic all the way through the essay.
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You gave some examples like waste, plastic, and planting trees.
coherence and cohesion
Your essay has an ending, so the reader can see your final thought.
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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • prioritize
  • immediate needs
  • connect with
  • distant
  • abstract
  • economic considerations
  • growing awareness
  • active participation
  • initiatives
  • movements
  • impacts
  • well-being
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