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The graph shows the number of people taking part in 4 kinds of sports in a particular region between 1985 and 2005.. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The graph
porvides
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provides
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informations
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information
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 about the
number
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 of
people
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 taking
parts
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part
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 in multiple kinds of sports,in particulr region between the years 1985 and 2005.
Overall
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, it's clear from the graph that both
numbers
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the number
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 of
people
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 playing basketball and badminton didn't change a lot.
In addition
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, the
number
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 of
rugby
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players
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 went down ,
whereas
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 the
tennis
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number of tennis
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players
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 went up.
According to
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 what is shown, by the year
of
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2005 the
number
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 of
players
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 of both sports
badminton
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, badminton
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 and
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rugby
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rugby,
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 became the same ,
although
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rugby
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was
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had
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 the
highst
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highest
number
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 of
players
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on
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in
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 1985.
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Finally
, after analysing the graph, I noticed that
people
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 who loved playing basketball and badminton haven't changed,
unlik
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unlike
people
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 who played
rugby
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 and tennis.

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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, people, rugby, players with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "went down" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • participation
  • trend
  • increase
  • decrease
  • fluctuation
  • popularity
  • demographics
  • sports
  • region
  • data
  • analysis
  • comparison
  • notable
  • overview
  • highest
  • lowest
  • 20-year period
  • particular
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