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The diagram below give information on transport and car use in Edmonton. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main feature, and make comparison where relevant.:

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The pie chart and the table below provide knowledge about transportation
methodsmotheds
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methods
 and car use in Edmonton.
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,the car usage and light rail transit are the two top
methods
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 being used among all transportation
methods
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, and the main reason people use cars is
profissional
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professional
 and educational reasons. The pie chart displays the different
methods
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 of transport,where the top usage among them is
car
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the car
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 , with almost half of the total percentage at 45% . The second top
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methods
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method
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 is light rail transit ,with
above of the
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over a
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 third of the total at 35%. The
last
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 two
methods
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 are represented
just
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by just
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 a fifth of the total, with 20% of the total combined. The three main reasons for using cars in the developed city, which represent the
fast
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vast
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 majority of the persantge are all related with creer and education needs
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.
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 Starting with going to work,which represents nearly half of the total at 55% .
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 the business needs represent approximately half of the percentage with 45%, taking the sons and daughters to their schools represant above of third of the percentage at 44%. And the
last
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twolast
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two
 reasons are nearly represant third of the total with 15% for each of them .

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "last".
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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words methods with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "represented" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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