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Many aspects of the way people dress today are influenced by global fashion trends. How has global fashion become such a strong influence on people's lives? Do you think this is a positive or negative development? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Nowadays, fashion trends have
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consumers`
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choices
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 an important factor for them?
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customers.
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money.
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, choosing your cloothing depend on the recent trend is diffenetly awful way of
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thinking
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following
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 you just to follow the trend.
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, trends do not take
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, it`s essential to be aware and not be affected by the global trends and be
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task response
Answer both parts more clearly: why world fashion is strong, and why it is good or bad.
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Give one or two real examples to support your ideas.
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Explain each main idea more. Do not stop after one short line.
coherence and cohesion
Use clear paragraph order: intro, reasons, your view, end.
coherence and cohesion
Link ideas with simple words like because, also, but, so, for example.
coherence and cohesion
Make sure each paragraph has one main idea and that all lines fit that idea.
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You gave a clear opinion that this is a bad way to choose clothes.
coherence and cohesion
Your essay has an introduction and a short ending.
coherence and cohesion
You tried to group ideas into body paragraphs.
Fully explain your ideas

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • global
  • fashion
  • clothes
  • dress
  • wear
  • look
  • style
  • brand
  • label
  • shop
  • price
  • money
  • media
  • ads
  • post
  • like
  • world
  • culture
  • express
  • expression
  • culture
  • work
  • jobs
  • earth
  • environment
  • press
  • pressure
  • spend
  • buy
  • design
  • trend
  • brand
  • celeb
  • celebrity
  • internet
  • online
  • shop
  • social
  • media
  • fashion
  • trend
  • idea
  • choice
  • fit
  • color
  • color
  • cloth
  • fabric
  • hand
  • care
  • harm
  • good
  • bad
  • benefit
  • loss
  • balance
  • relation
  • impact
  • effect
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