You live in a room in college which you share with another student. However, there are many problems with this arrangement and you find it very difficult to work. Write a letter to the accommodation officer at the college. In your letter describe the situation explain your problems and why it is difficult to work say what kind of accommodation you would prefer You do NOT need to write any addresses.

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Dear Sir, I hope
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letter finds you well. I am writing to express my concern towards the college accommodation, where I faced various problems. My name is Sam, and I am a student of B.A final year. I shared a room with another student, whose
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is quite different, and I was unable to understand him. The main problem is that the student is making
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during the day and night. He loves to listen
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on
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, and whenever he
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with their family members
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I never
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ear-pods. I politely asked him to lower their voice
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he never listened to me. Because of that, I found difficulty to concentrate on my studies. I humbly request
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offer me a personal space
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where I can work on improving myself.
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, I prefer quite environment
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studying. I hope you will understand my situation
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and will take
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prompt action on it. I am looking
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hearing from you soon! Yours faithfully, Sam

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task response
For task response: say more about the room and the problems in a clear way. Add one or two details about how this hurts your study.
task response
For task response: say the kind of room you want in a direct way, for example a single room in a quiet place.
coherence and cohesion
For coherence and cohesion: link ideas with simple words like because, so, and, but. This will make the letter easier to follow.
coherence and cohesion
For coherence and cohesion: keep each part on one main idea. One part for the situation, one for the problems, and one for your request.
task response
For task response: you answer all parts of the task and make your main problem clear.
task response
For task response: the tone is polite and right for a letter to an officer.
coherence and cohesion
For coherence and cohesion: the letter has a clear start, middle, and end.
coherence and cohesion
For coherence and cohesion: you use a good opening and closing for a formal letter.
Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

Topic Vocabulary:
  • shared room
  • roommate
  • accommodation officer
  • study in peace
  • daily routine
  • late at night
  • make noise
  • lack of privacy
  • concentrate on my work
  • prepare for exams
  • feel tired
  • solve the problem
  • similar study habits
  • single room
  • quiet place
  • move to another room
  • I would be grateful
  • as soon as possible
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