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People should focus more on solving problems related to the future, and should not spend time thinking about the past. To what extent do you agree or disagree.

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 that
people
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 should concentrate on their
future
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than
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rather than
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 spending their time
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thinking about the past. I party disagree with
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 statement.
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 excessive focus on past events
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people
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 from moving forward, I believe past experience is equally important for
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personal growth and better
decision making
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decision-making
. Focusing on
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future
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the future
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 always allows
people
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 to set goals
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 and work towards a better life. When
people
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 plans a head,
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 it automatically reduces the chances of failure, and in the same way,
people
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 feel themselves more energetic, and
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 consistent efforts towards achieving their planned goals.
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, if a student wants to achieve a first
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 in the class,
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 he will plan
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ahead
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 before the exams, and
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 each
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chapter carefully to beat the top scorer of their class. In
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 way, he will not only focused towards their studies but
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 stay positive to gain better grades.
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, I believe ignoring the past events is not a great idea.
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 learn a valuable lesson from their past experiences and try to avoid the same mistakes to be happen again in their
future
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.
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, if a
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person
 faced
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financial difficulties in their past, and used bank loans for personal purposes
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rather than
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investinng
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investing
 in any business. He would be
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wiser to manage their finances in the
future
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, and think twice before spending on
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anything
.
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, I believe past events change the mindset of individuals, and make them mature
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enough to
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take
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 decisions in
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. In conclusion,
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 focusing on the
future
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 is essential for progress and goal‑setting, the past
also
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 provides important lessons that help individuals grow.
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, a balanced approach is necessary for building a secure
future
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task response
Make your main view more clear from the start. You say you partly disagree, and this is good, but make this idea very clear in each body part too.
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Add one more clear and direct example. Your examples are related, but they need to be more exact and more natural.
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Explain your ideas a bit more. Some points are good, but they stop too soon.
coherence and cohesion
Use linking words in a simple but careful way. Some parts link well, but some sentences feel a bit broken.
coherence and cohesion
Keep one clear main idea in each paragraph. This will make your essay easier to follow.
coherence and cohesion
Check sentence order. A few ideas are hard to follow because the grammar changes the meaning.
task response
You answer both sides of the topic and give your own view.
coherence and cohesion
Your essay has a clear introduction, body paragraphs, and conclusion.
coherence and cohesion
The conclusion matches your main idea well.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Innovation
  • Progress
  • Proactive measures
  • Preparedness
  • Historical events
  • Personal experiences
  • Reflecting on the past
  • Prevent repetition of mistakes
  • Balanced approach
  • Cultural heritage
  • Accumulated knowledge
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