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Write a report with this question: The bar chart shows the types of media that people of different age groups used to get daily news in one country in 2011.

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The bar graph illustrates the various methods of media, which people
are
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apply
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in
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age
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the age
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 group between ten
to
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and
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 more than
sixty-five
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, who
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apply
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 prefer to have updates on news
in
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on
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 a regular basis of one country in 2011. There are
micro blogging
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microblogging
, radio, and social networks as
the
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apply
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ways of media.
Overall
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, there was
dramatically increased
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a dramatic increase in the use
 of using radio in order to climb the
age
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 range from eighteen to
sixty-five
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 plus,
whereas
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,
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apply
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micro blogging
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microblogging
 decreased the users,
marginal way
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marginally
from
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, from
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age
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 eighteen to more than
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sixty-five year old
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sixty-five-year-old
 generation.
Moreover
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, there was
noticeable
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a noticeable
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 record in social networks, which none of
used
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us used
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it
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apply
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as a method of getting daily news after
sixty-five
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 years. In to the details,
enormous
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an enormous
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 number of users used radio
,
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apply
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 as
the
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a
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 convenient method of receiving news,
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age of
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aged
 18-29, 30-49, 50-64, and 65 plus, the proportions
as
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were
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 approximately 90,
overly
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over
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 92, above 91, and nearly 88
respectively
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, respectively
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.
In contrast
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,
for micro blogging
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microblogging
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 dropped from
age
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 18-29 as approximately 22
percentage
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per cent
, and the least recorded for people, who were in more than 15
percentage
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per cent
, which
age
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 range
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sixty-five
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of sixty-five
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 plus.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words age, sixty-five with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • bar chart
  • media usage
  • age groups
  • digital media
  • traditional media
  • preferences
  • news consumption
  • social media
  • online news
  • newspapers
  • television
  • balance of media
  • demographics
  • reliance
  • trend
  • engagement
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