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Money spent on exploration of space is a complete waste, while it could be spent on improvements of living for people. To what extent do you agree or disagree.

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Do you believe that the earnings spent on
space
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exploration
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is
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are
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 wasteful? Some people believe that
space
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exploration
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 is a waste of
time
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while
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 others think that it is worth it.
This
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 topic will discuss both points of view
while
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 stating my own perspective. The people who believe it's wasteful think that the money should be spent on improving out life
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. They
also
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 think that
space
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exploration
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 could be dangerous in some cases. Astronauts could get lost in
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.
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,
space
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exploration
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 is very expensive.
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, it could impact the environment and cause pollution.
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, some think that
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 very beneficial for learning about our planet and for
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science.
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, some people believe that maybe in the future there is a chance that humans will live in
space
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 and
other
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 planets. As it can be a future survival for humans
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in case
 something happens to Earth.
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, satellites can help enable internet access, which helps in communication.
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, it may help in economic development and growth.
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 creates more jobs and supports research. Personally, I believe that
space
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exploration
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 is a waste of time at
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present. Our planet already has enough problems that we need to fix before exploring the outside. So, we should focus on
earth
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first
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then
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 explore
space
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.

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Answer the question more clearly. You say both sides, but your own view should be stronger from the start to the end.
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Add one or two clear examples to support your main ideas. This will make your points stronger.
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Develop each main point more. Some ideas are good, but they are short and not fully explained.
coherence and cohesion
Use linking words in a more natural way. Some parts connect well, but some ideas feel like a list.
coherence and cohesion
Make each paragraph focus on one main idea and explain it step by step.
coherence and cohesion
Check small grammar and word form problems because they can make your meaning less clear.
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You answer the topic and show both sides of the argument.
coherence and cohesion
Your introduction and conclusion are both present and easy to understand.
coherence and cohesion
The essay has a clear paragraph shape, which helps the reader follow your ideas.
Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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