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The graph below gives information about the price of bananas in four countries between 1994 and 2004. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisions where relevant.

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The line graph illustrates changes in
banana
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 prices in Japan, France, Germany and the US over the period from 1994 to 2004.
Overall
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, until 2000, the prices of bananas in four countries were relatively stable. More precisely, the
price
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 in Japan was always the highest, and the
price
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 in the USA was the lowest.
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, in 2001 and 2003, the prices went up and down dramatically. In Japan, the
banana
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price
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 rose sharply from 1994 to 1995, increasing by roughly 1 US dollar to a high of 2.8 US dollars per kilogram.
Afterward
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, the
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 dropped steeply to 2 US dollars per kg.
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, from 2000 to 2001, it declined again, reaching 1.6 US dollars per kg.
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, the situation was unstable; it had risen since 2001, and the
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 continued to climb until 2004.
On the other hand
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, in France, the
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price
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was
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fluctuated as well. More precisely, from 2002 to 2003, the
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 even hit the lowest
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 of the year,
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 came to 1 US dollar per kg.
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, the
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 of bananas in Germany and the US was much steadier. Compared to three other countries, Germany has always had the third most expensive bananas. In the US, aside from 2003, the
banana
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price
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 remained the lowest.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words banana, price with synonyms.
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