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The plans below show the site of a farm in 1950 and the same site today. Summerise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Beechwood farm 1950 and now.

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The plans
illustate
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illustrate
 changes in Beechwood
Farm
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 since 1950, how it
developped
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developed
 and what
new
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was added.
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, the
farm
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developped
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has developed
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 dramatically since 1950. A lot of inventions was implyed
and
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, and
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 some parts were reworked. At first glance structure of the
farm
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 stayed mostly the same. An agricultural
zones
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zone
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 with fruits and vegetables remained
untuched
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untouched
 with only acception in fruit trees part, where
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farm
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a farm
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 shop was built. The old barn was
reconstruced
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reconstructed
 into a holiday cottages and a smaller one appeared slightly closer to the road
next
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, next
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 to
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the chickens
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chickens
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chickens'
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 place
and
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farmhouse
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the farmhouse
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 wich stayed at the old
places
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place
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. A huge sheep zone was devided in a two smaller
.
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zones.
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 One of two was used to place a solar panels and
other
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the other
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 is used as a camping field. Other features of the
farm
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 stayed the same with a slight
improvements
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improvement
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 in tracks, which became
a
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apply
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roads, and
few
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a few
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 parking places appeared near the solar panels and in front of
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farm
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the farm
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 shop.

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task response
Give a clearer overview. Say the biggest changes in one short part.
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Cover all main changes. Some parts are named, but some change points are not fully clear.
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Use more exact words for place and change, like where things moved or what replaced what.
coherence and cohesion
Group ideas better. Write one part about areas that stayed the same, and one part about new things.
coherence and cohesion
Link ideas with simple words like and, while, but, also, in contrast.
coherence and cohesion
Check sentence order. Some lines stop and start in a way that breaks the flow.
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You gave an overview and showed that the farm changed a lot.
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You mentioned key changes like the farm shop, holiday cottages, solar panels, and camping field.
coherence and cohesion
You used a clear start with 1950 and now.
coherence and cohesion
Most ideas follow the map from one area to another.
Fully explain your ideas

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