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The graph shows the value in US dollars (in millions of dollars) of investment in funds of four categories from 1988 to 2014.

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The line graph illustrates the methods of US
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dollars
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dollar
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 funding for future investments from 1988 to 2014, which are the funding sources
as
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 property, gold, fine art, and company shares.
Overall
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,
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in
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the
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 particular graph indicated the highest investment in gold,
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however
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apply
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it fluctuated
in
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between 1992
,
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apply
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 and 2012. Specifically, fine art continuously changed
their
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its
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line
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line,
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stated by climbing
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rising
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 and
dropping up
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falling
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 until 2006.
In contrast
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, the company shares
interpretated
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interpreted
 differently, maintained the constant increase. Over the same period, the property developed gradually in
their
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its
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 funding,
whereas
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 not
exceeded
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exceed
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 other investment sources.
Furthermore
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, the gold reached the highest
extend
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extent
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, approximately 440 US
dollars
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 (
millions
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) in 2012, which turned
as
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out to be
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 the most famous funding source among others. At the beginning point, the fine art fluctuated from 1998 to 2006, and it was not more than 150 US
dollars
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 (
millions
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),
mean
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meanwhile
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, it ended up with above 320 US
(
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apply
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dollars
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millions
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).
On the other hand
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, company shares
was remain
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remained
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 stable as average
,
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of
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 240 US (
dollars
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millions
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).

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Vocabulary: Replace the words dollars, millions with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fluctuated" was used 2 times.
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