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Some people think that the best way to improve road safety is to get drivers tested each year. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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People think that they should
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 their drivers every
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 to advance road safety, and I think of
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to which extent do
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 I agree. In my opinion, I do not see
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 and have your licence; nothing could change your knwoledge in driving, unless if you are going to another country that has a different laws in driving,
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? I think there are better methods to make road safety better,
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 your driver. Driving is not
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theoretical knowledge, so there is no need to
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 it is like riding a bike
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 you learn it, you
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 be terrible at it. There is another reason that could change your driving skills, which is getting old, and if
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 would not be helpful either, and actually, nothing would be useful in
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Give a more clear answer from the start. Say if you fully disagree or only partly disagree, and keep this same view all through the essay.
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Add one or two real and clear examples. For example, talk about old drivers, bad roads, or phone use while driving.
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Explain your main ideas more. Some points are too short, so the reader cannot see why they are true.
coherence and cohesion
Use a more clear paragraph plan: one intro, two body parts, and one end.
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Link ideas in a smoother way. Some lines jump too fast from one point to another.
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Make sure each body part has one main idea and then support it with a reason or example.
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You answer the topic and give your opinion clearly many times.
coherence and cohesion
You have an introduction and a conclusion, so the essay has a full shape.
coherence and cohesion
Your ideas are easy to follow in most parts because your sentences stay on one topic.
Fully explain your ideas

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • traffic regulations
  • urban development
  • diminishing driving skills
  • reaction times
  • deteriorating vision
  • complacency
  • infrastructure
  • logistical implications
  • investment
  • administrative processes
  • refresher courses
  • enforcement
  • safe driving campaigns
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