Topic: Some young people are leaving the countryside to live in cities and towns, leaving only old people in the countryside. Do you think this is a positive or a negative development?
is beneficial for their healthcare and development
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while some
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people
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believe that young
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are leaving the
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to live in cities and towns, leaving only old
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in the
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essay will discuss both views and give my own opinion. On the one
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positive
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Answer the question more fully. Say clearly if this is positive or negative.
coherence and cohesion
Write a full introduction, body, and conclusion.
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Develop your main idea with one or two clear reasons.
coherence and cohesion
Use linking words like first, also, however, and in conclusion.
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Give a simple example to support your opinion.
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You introduced the topic clearly.
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You tried to show two sides of the topic.
Include an introduction and conclusion
A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.
The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.
The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:
Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation
Example:
To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported.After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.
Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:
Indeed, almost all people in many nations prefer owning real estate, considering renting a condo as a secondary choice. They see it as an investment asset and a means to exercise their right to do anything they love. I believe that this is a positive condition.
I am writing to let you know that I have some problems with the room arrangement. I have recently been assigned room 309 on the second floor in Kalpana hostel. As you know, this is a double sharing accommodation and my roommate is from the Pharmacy course.
In recent years, the Internet has become a major source of information about culture and history. As a result, some people believe that museums are no longer necessary. I disagree with this opinion to a large extent because museums offer unique educational experiences and preserve cultural heritage in ways that online sources cannot replace.
Throughout the course of history, living in a utopia has been the dream of people around the world; however, the idea of a perfect society has not been agreed upon. The following essay is going to discuss why equality is the key to establishing a utopian society and how this dream can be achieved through educational opportunities.