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The bar chart shows the number of households in the US by their annual income in 2007, 2011 and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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We can see that the chart shows the number of households in the US by their annual
income
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. We can
also
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 notice a general pattern that there are moderate changes in all
groups
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 except for one
group
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 that did not change throughout the years.
Firstly
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, pointing out the obvious, we can see that the number of households with an annual
income
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 between 50,000 and 74,999 did not increase or decrease at all
since
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between
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 2007
until
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and
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 2015, and it is the only
group
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 showing
this
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 phenomenon in the chart.
Secondly
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, we can see that every other
group
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 showed some kind of change, whether it's increasing or decreasing.
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, those with an annual
income
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less
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of less
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 than 25,000 and those with an annual
income
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around
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of around
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 25,000-49,999 both increased in 2011 but
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 decreased later in 2015.
While
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 the two
groups
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 earning 75,000 or more both showed a decline in 2011,
but
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they
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 surged again in 2015.
To sum up
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, we can say that there is only one
group
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 that did not change at all, two
groups
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 showed an increase
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then
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, then
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 a decrease, and two
groups
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 showed the opposite pattern, they decreased and later increased.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 100%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words income, groups, group with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 4 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • households = homes / families living together
  • annual income = money made in one year
  • the number of = how many
  • rose = went up
  • fell = went down
  • remained stable = stayed almost the same
  • slightly = a little
  • sharply = by a lot
  • the largest group = the biggest group
  • the smallest group = the least big group
  • accounted for = made up
  • in contrast = but
  • while = at the same time / but
  • overall = in general
  • respectively = in that order
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