IELTS Writing Correction Service
Writing Samples
Band 4

Some people think that only staff who worked in a company for a long time should be promoted to highter position. To wat exent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

✍️ Want to check your own essay?Try for free →
eventhough
Correct your spelling
Even though
 many believe that long-time service pays off, the truth is always about the effort that
employer
Correct article usage
the employer
show examples
 gives
, many
Punctuation problem
. Many
show examples
 people are full of truly valuable skills that advantage the company in
short-term
Correct article usage
the short-term
show examples
 period,
such
Linking Words
 as time
managment
Correct your spelling
management
 and leadership skills, and emotional intelligence. who are able to
successe
Correct your spelling
succeed
 and prove themselves the moment they need ,
this
Linking Words
 is why some of em recive the promotions in
short
Correct article usage
a short
show examples
 time
becuse
Correct your spelling
because
 the company
mintored
Wrong verb form
mentors
show examples
 how they are improving the
enfirement
Correct your spelling
environment
 of
thye
Correct your spelling
the
 place

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site's author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

task response
Answer the full question more clearly. Say if you agree, disagree, or partly agree in a direct way.
task response
Add one clear main idea and explain it with a simple example.
task response
Write a short ending that repeats your main view.
coherence and cohesion
Use full stops to break long lines into clear sentences.
coherence and cohesion
Put your ideas in order: main view, reason one, reason two, ending.
coherence and cohesion
Use simple link words like first, also, for example, and in the end.
task response
You give a clear idea that skill and hard work can lead to a higher job fast.
task response
You use some good work ideas like leadership, time management, and emotional intelligence.
coherence and cohesion
Your writing has one main direction and does not go far from the topic.
Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

Discover more tips in The Ultimate Guide to Get a Target Band Score of 7+ »- a book that's free for 🚀 Premium users.

What to do next:
Look at other essays: