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ou are going abroad on holiday and your friend will stay in your home while you are away. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter: explain where you hide the keys describe what your friend needs to do in your absence say when you are coming back You do NOT need to write any addresses. Begin your letter as follows: Dear

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Dear John, I hope you are keeping well. I am writing
this
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 letter to inform you that I will be leaving on June 26th
around
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, around
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 7 PM
for
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, for
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 my Switzerland trip
and
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, and
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 since you are staying home
so
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,
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 I wanted to pass
some
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 important instructions that I want you to know before I leave for my trip. I wanted to share the safest location to keep the key on the
day
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 of my arrival
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,
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while
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 you will be
working
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working,
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 since I will be reaching home at 4 PM
during
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on
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 that
day
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so
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. Please
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 leave the keys at home
and
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, and
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 please hide
it
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 under the big vase of money plant by the main entrance door.
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, there are two major things that
needs
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 to be done before my arrival from the trip.
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, please start diassembling sofa bed on your days off in order to save some time on our moving out
day
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.
Secondly
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, please try to reserve U- haul truck for July 30 as the reservations
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 to be done a month before. These small things will ease out our workload during our moving
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which
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 is scheduled right
very
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on the very
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 next
day
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 of my arrival
day
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. Lots of love and take care. Warm regards, Saniya

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task response
Answer all three points in a clear way. The key place is not fully clear because you talk about the day you come back, not only where the key is hidden.
coherence and cohesion
Use a simple order: key, jobs, return date. This will make the letter easier to follow.
coherence and cohesion
Keep one main idea in each part. The second part has many time ideas and this can confuse the reader.
coherence and cohesion
Use clear linking words like First, Also, and Finally.
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Say clearly when you are coming back. You mention your arrival time, but not the full return date in a direct way.
coherence and cohesion
You wrote a friendly letter with a clear opening and closing.
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You included all main points from the task.
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The jobs for your friend are clear and useful.
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