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The graph shows the information about international conferences in three capital cities in 1980 – 2010

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The graph shows the information about international conferences in three capital cities in 1980 – 2010
The provided line graph demonstrates the data on the number of worldwide conferences in three different urban areas from 1980 to 2010. It is crystal clear that a significant increase was observed in
city
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 C.
However
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, there has been a decrease in the number of
events
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 held in cities A and B over the entire period.
Additionally
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,
although
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City
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 C recorded the lowest figure of
events
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 at the beginning of the period,
City
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 A
subsequently
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 became the
city
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 with the fewest
events
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. Looking at the statistics in more detail,
while
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 the number of
events
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 held in
city
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 C in 1980 was 0, by 2000
this
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 quantity had reached 35. Over the past 30 years, the rate of conferences held in the
city
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 has dropped from 35 to 23.
While
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 there were 30 conferences in
City
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 B in 1980, these
events
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 dropped to 20 in 1985, but
then
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stabilized
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stabilised
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words city, events with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • international conferences
  • capital cities
  • trend
  • fluctuates
  • dominates
  • peak
  • trough
  • significant
  • increase
  • decrease
  • periods
  • data representation
  • interpretation
  • measure
  • y-axis
  • x-axis
  • comparative analysis
  • statistical figures
  • conclusion
  • summary
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