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Band 3

In the future, nobody will buy printed newspapers or books because they will be able to read everything they want online without paying. ause they will be T0 what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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There are two points of view about
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 printed newspapers, books, comics and so on; because of their availability
in
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 the internet
space
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, and all of them with no charge at all or very affordable costs. I
am
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agree
in
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 some extent with
this
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 statement. On the one hand, it is already a big tendency for
moneys
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 economy, presumably not only reading but watching as well. There is a perfect example,
the
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Pixar produced an
animatory
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animated
 movie about
humans
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 sedentary
life-style
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lifestyle
 and obesity;
this
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 movie
called
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is called
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Wall-E, for
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 me
personally
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 it is like a forecasting our future world, where nobody have a physicall books, because of modern technology. It should be noticed that
people
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 do not like reading anymore, because of many reasons, but I assume the social network app's addiction
it
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is one of them; there is a specific terminology for
this
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 - brainrot, when
people
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scrolling
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 cheap content without
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. Thereby, because of
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the world
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world
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world's
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 tendency,
people
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 are
more-and-more
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 vulnerable to
degredation
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degradation
instead
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 of absorbing already available information
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, there is a type of
people
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 who
very
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 conservative about it, those
people
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 do not want devices;
on the contrary
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, they want the old
life-style
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lifestyle
. In conclusion, it is remarkable that
internet
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the internet
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already
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has already
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 replaced books and other print productions, but noticeable that
their
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 heritage is huge.

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Make your main view more clear in the first part. Say if you mostly agree or mostly disagree.
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Add one more clear idea for each body part and explain it more.
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Use examples that link more directly to books and newspapers, not only film or apps.
coherence and cohesion
Make topic sentences more clear at the start of each body part.
coherence and cohesion
Link ideas step by step. Some parts jump too fast from one idea to another.
coherence and cohesion
Use words like first, also, however, for example, and as a result in a more careful way.
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You answer the topic and give your own view.
coherence and cohesion
You have an opening, two body parts, and a short end.
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You try to use an example to support your idea.
Fully explain your ideas

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • online
  • digital
  • print
  • newspaper
  • book
  • read
  • free
  • pay
  • buy
  • future
  • people
  • will
  • may
  • some
  • many
  • all
  • content
  • articles
  • stories
  • pages
  • device
  • phone
  • tablet
  • computer
  • internet
  • access
  • cost
  • cheap
  • expensive
  • market
  • change
  • trend
  • habit
  • preference
  • education
  • library
  • school
  • local
  • global
  • survive
  • exist
  • mix
  • combine
  • hybrid
  • special
  • edition
  • paper
  • local news
  • gift
  • readers
  • quality
  • trust
  • school
  • classroom
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