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In some countries, young people are encouraged to work or travel between finishing high school and starting a university studies. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages for young people who decide to do this.

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Introduction
Nowadays,the young
people
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provied
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provided
 to
work
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 or
traval
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travel
 after
finshing studing
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finishing studying
 and starting
new
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a new
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 level in
universtiy
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university
 has become common in modern society.
Body paragraph 1
This
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 viewpoint offers
savral
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several
 benefits for
work
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finshing
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finishing
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travel
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travelling
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 to
other
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another
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 city to
take a
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apply
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work
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also
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 has some
drawback
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drawbacks
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.
Body paragraph 2
In
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advantgaes
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advantages
 and disadvantages
for
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of
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work
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 and travel
of
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for
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 young
people
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on
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work
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working
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their
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like
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, like
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adlocens
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adolescence
age
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age,
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 is
signifcant
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significant
 because
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apply
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people
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 they depeanding to our self in every thing to the lives
,
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;
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 they feel to responsplity for going to
work
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 every
days
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day
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 and how to
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secure
 their
monay
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money
, all
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this thing
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these things
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emproved
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improve
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personailty
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personality
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people
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.
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on
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hand
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hand,
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 of travel the young
people
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outsid
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outside
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countries
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country
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 is
people
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fealing alonar
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feeling alone
 and
no body
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nobody
 can take care for him if he scik,
this
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fealing
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feeling
 is not good
to
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for
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people
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 becoues can
led
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lead
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 to
depresser
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depression
 or
anxity
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anxiety
 for
long
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a long
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tarm
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time
, so the friend is very
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important
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 period of
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life
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Conclusion
In conclusion, I believe
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that from
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the
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an
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durning chiledhood
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during childhood
 will
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encourage
 the
pearnts
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parents
 to
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send
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both the son and
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girl
 to
trip
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travel
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 without the mother or father
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. This
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this
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 can preparing him to future life.

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task response
Answer both sides in a clear way. Write one main good point and one main bad point with simple support.
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Your ideas are there, but they are not clear enough. Use short sentences and explain each point step by step.
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Give one real or simple example for each main point. This will make your answer stronger.
coherence and cohesion
Your essay has a start and an end, but the middle is hard to follow. Make one paragraph for good points and one for bad points.
coherence and cohesion
Use clear link words like First, Also, However, For example, and In conclusion.
coherence and cohesion
Keep one idea in one sentence. Some sentences now have too many problems, so the meaning is not easy to follow.
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You answered the topic and talked about both work and travel.
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You gave at least one good side and one bad side.
coherence and cohesion
Your essay has an introduction and a conclusion.
coherence and cohesion
You tried to organize the essay into parts.
Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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