You have just finished a language course provided by your company and want an- other. Write a letter to your manager. In your letter you should say: - why you liked the course - why you need more - and say where and when the course should take place

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Dear
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, I hope
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letter finds you well. I am writing to seek your permission to attend
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another
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that will be offered by your company in the coming weeks. Previously, I attended the
English-spoken
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English-speaking
classes, and the teacher explained everything in a practical way. It
only
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only improves my linguistic skills, but
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encourage
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encourages
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me to speak with confidence. Now, I am capable
to deal
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of dealing
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with our international investors
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and
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the documents in an effective way. Now, I am thinking
to take
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of taking
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another
course
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, which will be French. It is quite demanding though, and I want to enhance my
knowlege
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knowledge
by learning something new. Even the teacher will
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remain the same in
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course
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, and I already made a strong academic connection with her. She will help me to learn
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language faster. I am planning to take classes on
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weekends
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as I am free during those days. I humbly request
you
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that you
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to
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give me
a
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permission to attend
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course
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. It will not create any conflict in my work-schedule. I hope
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positive response from your side. I look forward to your prompt response. Yours faithfully, Sam

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task response
Task response: You answered all parts, but some ideas need to be more clear and more full.
task response
Task response: Say more clearly why you need the new course for your work.
coherence and cohesion
Coherence and cohesion: Your letter has a clear start, middle, and end, but some lines are hard to follow because of word choice and grammar.
coherence and cohesion
Coherence and cohesion: Use simple linking words like and, so, because, and also to make ideas move more smoothly.
coherence and cohesion
Coherence and cohesion: Keep one main idea in each paragraph.
task response
Task response: You covered why you liked the course, why you need more, and when the course should take place.
coherence and cohesion
Coherence and cohesion: The letter form is good, with a greeting, clear paragraphs, and a polite ending.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • enjoyment
  • positive learning environment
  • skills
  • knowledge
  • benefit
  • communication
  • training
  • professional development
  • career progression
  • convenient
  • accommodate
  • participation
  • course suggestion
  • time frame
  • location
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