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This line graph illustrates the number of tourists who visited Caribbean islands between 2010 and 2018, measured in millions

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The graph demonstrate total
number
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 of
people
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 visit to Cabribbean
island
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 and
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people
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the number of people
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 who stayed on cruise ships and
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island
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the island
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 between 2010
tp
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and
 2017. It can be seen
,
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 that the total
number
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 of visitors was 1
million
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in
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at
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 the
starting
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start
 of 2010, and it shows a significant gain and reached
to
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apply
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3.5
millions
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million
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.
However
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,
people
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 who
was
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were
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 staying on
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island
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the island
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 in 2010
was
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were
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 nearly 0.8
million
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.
Furthermore
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, the
number
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 of visitors who stayed on cruise ships was very
less
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low,
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 nearly 0.3
million
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 in 2010 and reached
to
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apply
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2
million
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 by the end of 2017. In detail, the
number
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 of visitors increased by 2.5
million
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 between 2010
to
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and
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 2017.
In addition
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,
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people
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the number of people
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 who visit on
island
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 was less than 0.3
million
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 and showed a significant rise after 2012 and reached
to
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a
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 first place
by
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of
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 2
million
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.
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, individuals who used to stay on cruise ships show jump and stayed stable
2013
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from 2013
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 to 2015 and
end
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ended
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 up at 1.5
million
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 in 2017.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, people, island, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stayed" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 2 times.
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