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the line graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular caribbean island between 2010 and 2017 summarise the infromation by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant

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The
lin
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line
 graph illustrates the proportion of people who are
particular
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particularly
 visiting the caribbean Island from 2010 to 2017.
Overall
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, it can be seen that
total
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the total
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of the
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number of visitor are significant rising
up
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during the period time,
while
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 the
proprotion
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proportion
 of
another
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the other
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 two gruops are fluctuate.
However
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,
in
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at
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 the end of
period
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the period
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 time the
bumner
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number
 of tourist are increased.
Firstly
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, visitors staying on cruise ships are
fluctuation
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fluctuating
 in
first
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the first
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 4 years.
In contrast
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, the
number of total are
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total number is
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 extremely increasing and reach at on top at 3.5 million.
Moreover
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, it
seem
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seems
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 like rising up 10 per cent every single
yaer
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year
.
While
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,
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apply
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 people who are staying on cruise ship aslo slightly rose
up
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apply
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and
reach to
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reached
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 2 million
proportion
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apply
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in 2017.
On the other hand
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, from the beginning
tourist
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tourists
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 who are staying on
island
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the island
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 are remaining.
In addition
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, there are rising
up
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apply
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and remaining at
same
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the same
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 level for
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last
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the last
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 5 years.
Furthermore
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, it decreased
down
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apply
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and
get
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got
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 back
on
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to
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 the end of
period
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the period
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time
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apply
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.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reach" was used 2 times.
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