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In the future, people may have to live on other planets. Some think that it is, therefore, important to spend money researching other planets, such as Mars. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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 years, concerns about the future of humanity have increased, and many people believe that humans may eventually need to live on other planets.
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 I acknowledge that there are many urgent problems on Earth that require financial support, I am mostly of the opinion that governments should invest money in researching other planets
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 as Mars,
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,may ensure the long-term development of
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Write a full essay, not only one long start. Add 2 body parts and 1 end part.
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Answer all parts of the question more clearly. Say how much you agree, and explain why.
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Give at least 2 clear main ideas and support each idea with a reason or example.
coherence and cohesion
Use full stops to break long lines into clear sentences.
coherence and cohesion
Add linking words like First, Also, However, and In conclusion.
coherence and cohesion
Make sure each sentence connects well to the next one.
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You give a clear opinion: you mostly agree with spending money on space research.
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Your writing stays on the topic and talks about Mars and the future of humanity.
coherence and cohesion
There is a basic essay opening with the topic and your view.
Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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