Information technology is changing many aspects of our lives and now dominates our home ,leisure and work activities. To what extent do the benefits of information technology outweight the disadvantages?

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Information technology is changing our lives
to a lot of things
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in many ways
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such
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as money transfer,booking
air line
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airline
tickets and
communications
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communicating
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other
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others
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this
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is a benefit as I see it. On
other
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hand
information
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technology had a lot of people disadvantaged with it because they saw it waste a lot of time
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bad users

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Answer all parts of the task more clearly. Say if the good side is much more, a little more, or not more than the bad side.
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Add one clear main idea for the good side and one clear main idea for the bad side. Then explain each idea.
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Use simple examples, like online bank use, online study, or work from home, to support your ideas.
coherence and cohesion
Write in a clear order: start, body, body, end.
coherence and cohesion
Use linking words like first, also, however, for example, and in the end.
coherence and cohesion
Make each sentence full and clear. Some parts are hard to follow now.
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You stayed on the topic of information technology.
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You gave both the good side and the bad side.
coherence and cohesion
You used some basic linking words like and and on the other hand.
Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general
Topic Vocabulary:
  • dominates
  • instant communication
  • unprecedented access
  • automation
  • efficiency
  • productivity
  • flexibility
  • cybersecurity threats
  • privacy concerns
  • critical thinking
  • social isolation
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