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You recently organised an all-day meeting for your company, which took place in a local hotel. In their feedback, participants at the meeting said that they liked the hotel, but they were unhappy about the food that was served for lunch. Write a letter to the manager of the hotel. In your letter say what the participants liked about the hotel explain why they were unhappy about the food suggest what the manager should do to improve the food in future

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Dear Sir, I am writing
this
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 email with regards to the quality of
food
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 that was served at your hotel during my company's meeting
which
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, which
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 was held
on
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apply
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last
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 Saturday. On
one
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the one
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 hand, our participants really liked the
ambiance
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ambience
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 of the hotel.
Moreover
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, the staff was extremely friendly and greeted us very politely. They
also
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 made sure that the lunch was served on time.
However
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, I received a number of
complains
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complaints
 from the participants regarding the taste of the
food
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. The
food
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 was not served hot, and the chicken curry was very spicy.
Consequently
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, many of our participants suffered from stomach
ache
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aches
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 the next day. I would suggest
you
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that you
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to
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train your staff to
re-heat
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reheat
 the
food
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 before serving it to the guests.
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, ask your chef to keep the spice level mild so that everyone can enjoy the
food
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. I hope you take these measures so that your guests do not face these issues in the future. Thanks for your time and consideration. Sincerely, Anum Ayaz

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task response
Add one more clear detail about why the food was bad.
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Use a more formal line than 'Thanks for your time and consideration'.
coherence and cohesion
Link ideas with simple words like 'First', 'Also', and 'Because of this'.
coherence and cohesion
Check small word errors like 'complains' and 'on last Saturday'.
task response
You answered all parts of the task.
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Your tone is polite and right for a letter to a manager.
coherence and cohesion
Your letter is easy to follow from start to end.
coherence and cohesion
Each paragraph has one main idea.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Compliments
  • Ambiance
  • Professionalism
  • Hospitality
  • Quality
  • Variety
  • Freshness
  • Catering
  • Menu options
  • Dietary requirements
  • Feedback
  • Survey
  • Collaboration
  • Improvements
  • Rectify
  • Gastronomy
  • Culinary
  • Hospitality industry
  • Client satisfaction
  • Constructive criticism
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