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Writing Samples
Band 4

“Libraries are irrelevant in the age of the internet and should not be publicly funded.” Do you agree or disagree?

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, the real world is full of changes, especially in technology and
internet
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the internet
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.
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, a lot of people have been forced to adapt to these changes and start using it daily.
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One aspect that many argue about
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is how
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 to continue pursuing
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their
 hobbies, which help them to feel better or educate themselves,
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 as reading, searching or looking for inspiration ,

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Answer the question more clearly. Say if you agree or disagree in the first part.
coherence and cohesion
Write a full introduction, 2 body parts, and a conclusion.
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Develop one main idea in each part and explain it with a simple example.
coherence and cohesion
Use linking words like 'First', 'Also', 'For example', and 'In conclusion'.
coherence and cohesion
Check sentence order. Some ideas now stop too early and feel unfinished.
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Stay on the topic of libraries, the internet, and public money.
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You start with a general idea about technology and the internet.
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Your topic is related to the question.
coherence and cohesion
You try to connect ideas with result words like 'As a result'.
Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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