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The plans below show the site of a farm in 1950 and the same site today. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The map illustrates the changes in Beechwood
Farm
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 from 1950 to the present.
Overall
Linking Words
,
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farm
Correct article usage
the farm
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is underwent
Wrong verb form
has undergone
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 striking alterations,
includong
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including
 solar panels, camping field,parking zones, etc. In
1950
Punctuation problem
1950,
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 the
farm
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 had only one
staying
Correct word choice
main
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 place, which is called Farmhouse, located at east. It was rich
of
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in
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 trees,
such
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 as fruit
tree
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trees
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, soft fruits and vegetables. They were grown between
river
Correct article usage
the river
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 and
road
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the road
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.
Also
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,
on
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in
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 the
south-east
Punctuation problem
southeast,
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 there was a farmland, where chickens were habituated. And on the northest site, sheep
was
Correct subject-verb agreement
were
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 there. The way to reach the
farm
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 was through the track, and the
farm
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 was surrounded by the river. At present, Beechwod
farm
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 filled empty field with two parking and camping zones.
Moreover
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, there are solar panels and farmshop next to the fruit trees across the road. Holiday cottages replaced the barn, near
to
Correct determiner usage
the
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 farmhouse, which is very convenient.
Barn
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The barn
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 was relocated to the
northest
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northwestern
 site, where chickens
habituate
Wrong verb form
are habituated
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.

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Add a more clear overview with the main changes.
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Report more key changes from 1950 to now in a full way.
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Use more exact place words like north, south, east, and west.
coherence and cohesion
Group ideas better: old farm in one part, new farm in one part.
coherence and cohesion
Link ideas with simple words like also, while, and in contrast.
coherence and cohesion
Make each sentence easy to follow and check word order.
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You gave an overview and named big changes.
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You compared the past site with the site now.
coherence and cohesion
Your essay has clear paragraph breaks.
coherence and cohesion
Most ideas follow a time order from past to present.
Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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