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Some people believe that researching the past is a waste of time and money, and that we shouldinstead focus on the issues facing today's world. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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 some people hold the view that researching history is unnecessary and
waste
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sources
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 and believe that we should pay attention to the issues in present.
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 my perspective,I partly agree
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I think that they both are equally essential . Admittedly,against the backdrop of the rapid development of
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 ,there are many risks under the surface which need to
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solve
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.studying the present
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 a vital role in tackle
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 issues.
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artificial intelligence in order to
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 our
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continuous living
 and amusement demands, and more importantly,researching new medicine in order to
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 with severe virus
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infections
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,
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,which contributes to save plenty of people’s
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however
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,it isn’t
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 that we should only focus on current research
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neglect
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 the historical research,which is relatively limited
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 solve world issues. Researching the past brings substantial benefits to
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 current problems.
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firstly
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,historical experiences help society avoid repetitive mistakes
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for instance
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analyzing
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 the causes of financial crises in the past can serve as a warning
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when contemporary governments
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formulate the fiscal and financial policies ,preventing significant economic fluctuations
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as a result
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make
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 our economic development stable
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furthermore
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,ancient wisdom and tradition experience provide useful ideas to tackle
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current
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for
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 example,in the context of intensified environmental pollution ,some eco-friendly methods and techniques in the past can
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 in modern environmental protection,which can
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 a sustainable society in
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To sum up
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, it is important to deal with present-day problems, but learning from history is
also
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 very valuable. We should spend time and resources on both historical research and current affairs
instead
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 of ignoring either one.

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Make your main view very clear in the first paragraph. Say exactly how far you agree or disagree.
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Develop each main idea more fully. Explain how and why, not only what.
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Use examples with clearer links to your main point.
coherence and cohesion
Group ideas in a simple order: main idea, explanation, example, result.
coherence and cohesion
Use clearer linking words like First, Also, However, As a result.
coherence and cohesion
Check that each sentence connects clearly to the one before it.
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You answer both sides of the question and give your own view.
coherence and cohesion
You include an introduction and a conclusion.
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You use examples like covid-19, money problems, and the environment.
coherence and cohesion
Your essay has clear body paragraphs with one main idea in each.
Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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