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Band 2.5

In the future, people may have to live on other planets. Some think that it is therefore important to spend money researching other planets such as Mars. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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people
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 argue that it is necessary to expend money for investigation related to
move
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 other planets
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such
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, such
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 as Mars.
While
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l
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I
 accept to put money
for
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into
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this
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researching
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research
 is not vital,
l
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I
 am mostly of the opinion that it
have
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has
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 advantages. It is undeniable that
,
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 most countries
have
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do not have
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not
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a
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 huge amount of state budget. Because of that, they can not put enough investment aside for essential fields like health, education, social issues
and
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,
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 etc. In
this
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 way, creating another capital for
changing
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a changing
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 planet may be
dilemma
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a dilemma
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in
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for
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 those governments.
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,
this
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 investigation requires
more
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a more
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 intelligent specialist.
It is clear that
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,
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apply
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 some
population have not
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populations do not have
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 any experts who can be engaged in spaces
and
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, and
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 they suffer from
lack
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a lack
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 of
sources
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resources
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. So,
this
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 condition
make
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makes
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 them
to be depend
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dependent
 on
leader
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the leader
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 countries
which
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, which
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they
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apply
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will give priority to their own
people
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.
This
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 will create new conflicts
amoung
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among
 countries.
However
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, if we consider that, the population in the world is
rise up
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rising
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 day by day. So, after decades of years, there is
danger
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a danger
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 of extinction for sources of water and food. Many
people
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 have rights thinking about future welfare,
therefore
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 they guess we will encounter
with
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apply
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famine. Because of
shortage
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the shortage
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people
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, people
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 will suffer from other
disease
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diseases
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.
This
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 leads to terrible disasters.

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Give a clear answer in the first part and keep the same view to the end.
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Add one short ending that sums up your main idea.
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Explain each main point more with one clear reason or one simple example.
coherence and cohesion
Use clear paragraph order: intro, one point against, one point for, ending.
coherence and cohesion
Link ideas with simple words like first, also, however, so, because.
coherence and cohesion
Make sure each paragraph has one main idea only.
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You answer the topic and talk about both sides.
coherence and cohesion
You have separate paragraphs for different ideas.
coherence and cohesion
You use some linking words like however and because.
Fully explain your ideas

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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