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As people rely more and more on technology to solve problems, the ability of humans to think for themselves will surely deteriorate. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Introduction
It is often argued that
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 are more and more
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technology
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 to solve problems and the ability of humans to think about themselves will surely
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decrease
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.
This
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technology
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 helps
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 solve their
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 without
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 their ability.
Body paragraph 1
One major reason why I disagree is that
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 improves
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communication
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, there are many apps
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people
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talk
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, like
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 social media apps.
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 shows that they can get help from
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,
it is clear that
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Body paragraph 2
Another key argument is that
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nowadays
 there is AI,
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and AI
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 has changed our
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. To illustrate, AI
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, AI helps us by
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 it helps us how to deal with
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hard situation and third learn many
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 that can help us
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strengthens
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I disagree
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 to the point mentioned above
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technology
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people's
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 ability.
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further
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 proves that we will get new and
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 information.
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, learn how to think by doing
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research
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reading
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 online.
Conclusion
In conclusion,
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 I firmly disagree because the positive things are more than the negative
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 and I believe that the
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task response
Answer the main question more directly in each body part. Say clearly why you disagree.
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Give fuller ideas. Some points are too short or too general, so the reader wants more detail.
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Use one clear example for each main point and explain how it supports your idea.
coherence and cohesion
Make each paragraph follow one simple plan: main idea, example, explanation.
coherence and cohesion
Link ideas in a clearer way. Some sentences repeat the same point without adding new meaning.
coherence and cohesion
Check sentence order. A few lines are hard to follow because the meaning changes too fast.
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You answer the question and give a clear opinion: you disagree.
coherence and cohesion
Your essay has an introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion.
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You try to use examples such as social media and AI to support your view.
Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Over-reliance
  • Cognitive capabilities
  • Critical thinking
  • Problem-solving skills
  • Diminish
  • Augment
  • Natural sense of direction
  • Access to information
  • Cognitive development
  • Education reforms
  • Technological advancement
  • Nuanced position
  • Recapitulate
  • Affirm
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