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Some people believe that university students should pay all the cost of studies because university education only benefits students themselves not the society as a whole. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Introduction
A
grup
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group
 of
people
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 think that
university
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studnts
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students
 should pay all the
cost
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costs
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 of studies because
universtiy
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university
 education only benefits
student
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 themaselves as a whole.
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this
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 view his a lot of opinion and I
diseagree whit
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disagree with
 that .
Body paragraph 1
Firstly
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people
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, people
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how
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who
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 think
student
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 most pay all the
cost
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costs
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 for
there
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their
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 education because
university
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 studies have only benefits for the
students
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students,
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whte out
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without
 benefits for society,
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for example
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a
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student
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apply
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applies
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 to
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university
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a university
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and
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, and
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 after he Finched his go to work
out of
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outside
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 the contry in
this
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case
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case,
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 he
is
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does
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 not help
the
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apply
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society
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However
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. However
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this
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people
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 are less than 10% of
people
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 how studies in the
university
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.
Body paragraph 2
IN
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On
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 the other hand
students
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, students
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 how studis in the
university
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 and work in there contry is 90% because a study from a
grup
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group
 of students from
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university
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the University
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 of
jeddah so
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Jeddah. So,
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 as we can see
the
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, the
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student
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 how studie in
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university
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the university
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is help
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are helping
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 the society and
make
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making
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 a good increas for many
of kind
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kinds
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 of
company
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companies
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 and jups so the assut the socity .
Conclusion
IN conclusion,
this
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 has a lot of views and
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student
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students
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 should not pay all the
cost
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costs
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 for
university
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 because we need to
devalop aour socity
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develop our society
 for a good life and we have to
disa
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discuss

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task response
Answer the question more clearly. Say if you agree, disagree, or partly agree, and keep this same view all through the essay.
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Add more clear main ideas. Each body part should have one main point and then explain it.
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Use a real and clear example to support each main point.
coherence and cohesion
Make your ideas easy to follow. Start with an introduction, then two body parts, then a conclusion.
coherence and cohesion
Use linking words in a simple way, like first, also, however, and in conclusion.
coherence and cohesion
Write full sentences and connect them well so the reader can follow your meaning.
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You gave your opinion in the introduction and the conclusion.
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You tried to give reasons and an example about work in another country and work in the home country.
coherence and cohesion
Your essay has a basic shape with an opening, body ideas, and an ending.
Fully explain your ideas

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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