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Writing Samples
Band 5

You work for a small company. You need to arrange for some time off work. Write a letter to your employer. In your letter • explain why you want to take time off work • give details of how long you will be away • suggest how you will make up for the lost time You do NOT need to write any addresses. Begin your letter as follows: Dear……………………,

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Dear Jonah, I hope
this
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 letter finds you well. I am writing
this
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 letter
as regards
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 taking some
time
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 off
work
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 for a few weeks. I would
be needing
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need
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 about two weeks off
work
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 to get
my self
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myself
 sorted out
as
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, as
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i
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I
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 recently got a call from back home that my cousin is ill and would require a family member to be around during
this
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 hard
time
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.
This
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 has been a huge burden on me to care for my family
and
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 it is already taking a toll on my mental health ,
hence
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 why I'm requiring some
time
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 off
work
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. I know
this
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 is quite
alot
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a lot
 to ask from the company,
that is
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 why I have
also
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 worked out some plans, not to be completely away from completing my
work
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,
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.
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 I would be working remotely at my own
time
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 so that
i
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I
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 can make up for the lost
time
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 and
also
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 be able to catch up with
work
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. I
also
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 have plans to
work
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 overtime to make up for lost
time
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 and speed up things with
work
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. I am sorry for any inconvenience
this
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 would cause the company
and
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 I'm looking to returning baxk soonest to
work
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. I hope my request is granted
as
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 I'm looking forward to your response. Thank you so much. Yours
Faithfully
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, Harriet

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task response
Say more clearly when you will leave and when you will come back.
task response
Use a more clear work plan to show how you will make up the time.
coherence and cohesion
Keep one main idea in each part so the letter is easier to follow.
coherence and cohesion
Use linking words like also, so, and because in a simple way.
task response
You answered all parts of the task.
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Your reason for time off is clear and personal.
coherence and cohesion
The letter has a clear opening and ending.
coherence and cohesion
Your ideas mostly move in a clear order.
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Requesting time off
  • Family commitments
  • Health reasons
  • Personal development
  • Duration
  • Compensate
  • Delegating tasks
  • Minimize impact
  • Urgent matters
  • Accommodate
  • Gratitude
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