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The map below shows the plan of a museum in 1998 and after some changes were made in it in 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

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the
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The
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 given
map
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 illustrates the
stracture
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structure
 of a
museum
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 in 1998 and its changes by the year of 2018.
Overall
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,the
museum
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 underwent extended transformation
troughout
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throughout
 the
map
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,
while
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 ticket entrance\exit and permanent
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exibition
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exhibition
 rooms remain unchanged.
According to
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 the
map
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in
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on
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 the east
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side
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side,
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 there was
empty
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an empty
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 field .Just near was a permanent
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exibition
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exhibition
room
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.
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besides
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 in
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the north
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north
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north,
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 there was a cafe
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. Also,
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also
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 in the
center
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centre
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 of the
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museum
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museum,
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 a garden was situated.
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moreover
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Moreover,
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 in
left
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the left
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 corner
was
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, there was
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empty
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an empty
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 as same as east
side
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and
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, and
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 south west can
seen
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seen,
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 a temporary
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exibition
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exhibition
room
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 was located
,
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. Apart
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apart from
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this
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 shop,wc,and others
was
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were
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 in
southeast
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the southeast
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 part.
furthermore
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 ticket counter was just
right
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to the right
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side
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front
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apply
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of
main
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the main
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 entrance. Looking at the
map
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 more
detailsly
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closely
 in
2018
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2018,
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 it can be seen that in the north
cafe
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cafe,
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 there was a washroom renovated
and
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, and
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old
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the old
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 one in
south
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the south
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 east corner
have
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has
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 been demolished.
a
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A
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 brand new
rastaurant
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restaurant
 was
opend
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opened
 at the same time the temporary
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exibition
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exhibition
room
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relocated
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was relocated
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 in west part of
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museum
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the museum
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 and extended some space.a shop and
and
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apply
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bags and
coat
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a coat
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build
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built
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 at south west
side
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.
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along
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Along
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 with
this
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, in the center the garden have been some
modification
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modifications
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 by adding a cafe sitting area
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,
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and the right
side
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 of musem fully
got empty
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emptied
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; however
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however
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however,
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 the permanent
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exibition
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exhibition
room
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 and ticket /
entrence
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entrance
 exit
untouched
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have remained untouched
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during whole over
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throughout
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 the time.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words map, museum, exibition, side, room with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "changes" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "map" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • rectangular shape
  • central garden area
  • symmetrically arranged
  • expanded galleries
  • visitor flow management
  • temporary exhibition space
  • permanent gallery
  • visitor facilities
  • customer service focus
  • dedicated children's area
  • expanded restroom facilities
  • museum gardens
  • unoccupied outdoor space
  • shift towards long-term exhibits
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