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the following plans show recent archaeological findings at a historic site in the year 2004 and 2014

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The maps illustrate the archaeological findings discovered at a historic
site
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 between 2004 and 2014.
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, the historic
site
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 underwent a number of significant changes, the most important of which are the development of archaeological facilities and the expansion of discovered ancient buildings,
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 the layout of the temple and the surrounding natural features remain largely the same. In the north-western part of the
site
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, the tree remained in the same location throughout the period. During the same period, an ancient stadium was discovered in the north-west,
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 an ancient palace
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 was uncovered at the centre of the
site
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.
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, an ancient toilet was found in the northern section of the
site
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. It is worth noting that the ancient temple, which was situated in the south-central part, remained unchanged over the ten years. The eastern side of the location
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 has a number of changes, with several ancient houses being identified in the north-eastern part and an ancient tomb being discovered in the southeast. Meanwhile, the ancient temple remained
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in its original position near the coastline, and no changes were made to the sea or the surrounding landscape.

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Add a clearer overview of the biggest changes in one short sentence.
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Check map facts very carefully. Do not repeat the temple in two places if the map shows one place only.
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Use more key comparisons, like what was new, what stayed the same, and where each change was.
coherence and cohesion
Group ideas by area in a more even way, for example west side in one part and east side in one part.
coherence and cohesion
Avoid small grammar breaks with commas and spaces, because they make the flow less smooth.
coherence and cohesion
Use linking words simply and clearly, such as meanwhile, also, by contrast, and overall.
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The essay has a clear introduction and a clear overall view.
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You describe both change and no change, which is good for a map report.
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The essay follows a clear order by place, so it is easy to read.
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Main points are grouped into paragraphs, which helps the reader.
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    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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