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is it better to buy just a few expensive clothes rather than lots of cheater clothes .

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There is an ongoing debate about whether it is better to have
few
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a few
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high end
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high-end
 clothes, or to have many cheaper ones. In my
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 I completely agree
with
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that
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 having
few
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a few
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 good ones is the better choice.
As it
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It
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 offers the best
overall
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 quality in every single section.
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, individuals assume the more money it costs, the more fashionable it is. Having
such
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 a quality is one of the most significant roles of most
clothings
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clothing
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. As it makes close contact with human skin, leaving rash marks, redness or
itchyness
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itchiness
 would be
burden
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a burden
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 to whoever is wearing it. And
that is
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 deeply embedded
with
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in
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 how good and natural
is the material
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the material is,
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 plus
it's
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 origin. From my experience
after
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, after
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 wearing
cheap
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a cheap
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, unreliable piece of clothe uncomfortable feeling kicks in. Even though people still
creates
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create
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 outstanding outfits with
so called
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so-called
 cheaper clothes
it
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, it
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 is inevitable that fashion peaks
goes
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go
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 to the money
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at
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in
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 the end.
Biggest
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The biggest
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 stars or
sport
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sports
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 personalities are often seen wearing
top notch
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top-notch
 clothing brands
such
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 as gucci, prada and LV.
Nowadays
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Nowadays,
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 even
the
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apply
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young people
attempts
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attempt
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 to imitate them by closely copying the brands of
thier
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their
 clothes, most importantly the
high end
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high-end
 fashion sense.
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, when some celebrities like Cristiano Ronaldo dresses with a nice suit or outfit from a big clothing
companies
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company,
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 whoever sees it as
mesmerizing
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mesmerising
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 is likely to replicate what is was to it's minute detail.
To sum up
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,
more
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the more
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 expensive the cloth is more
noticable
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noticeable
 the advantage it has by quality
and
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, and
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it's
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its
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overall
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 beauty.

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coherence cohesion
Make your main idea more clear in each body part.
coherence cohesion
Use linking words like first, also, however, and so more carefully.
task achievement
Add one clear example for each main point.
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Explain your ideas more fully so the reader can follow them easily.
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Check that every sentence answers the question directly.
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You have a clear opinion from the start.
coherence cohesion
Your essay has an introduction, body, and ending.
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You use an example about famous people and brands.
Your opinion

Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.

If the question asks what you think, you MUST give your opinion to get a good score.

Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

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...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

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