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The charts below show the age of visitors from the UK to Spain in 1983 and 2003.

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The given pie chart provides information about the age of travellers from the UK to Spain, between 1983 and 2003. The data are measured in percentages.
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it is clear that
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 the highest figure was recorded by visitors aged 35-54
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 old,
while
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 the 16-24
years
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 old visitors represented the lowest
rate
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. Observing in detail, in 1983,
people
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 who were aged around 35-54 accounted for half of the chart, representing 50%. There was a little difference between the
rate
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 of
people
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 who were over 55 and 25-34
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 old, constituting 16% and 20%, respectively. The lowest
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 was made up by
people
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 aged 16-24
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 old
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 constituted 4%. The figure for
people
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 who were aged 0-15 accounted for 10%. Turning to 2003, the
rate
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 of
people
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 aged 35- 54years old
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people
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decreased to 35%. There was an increase in the percentage of
people
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 aged 16-24 and 55+, representing 15% and 26%, respectively. There was a similar figure in 0-15 and 25-34-year-old
people
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, constituting 12%.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words years, rate, people with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 2 times.
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